accounts-whyadd.page grammar fixes

Bug #1220983 reported by John Kim on 2013-09-05
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ubuntu-docs (Ubuntu)
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Kevin Godby

Bug Description

GIVEN:
Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat and e-mail straight to your desktop and makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once and every time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

I think it needs a lot more commas to facilitate reading.

PROPOSED:
Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat, and e-mail straight to your desktop. It also makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once, and every time you start your computer, all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

Kevin Godby (godbyk) wrote :

I've added some of these commas. I left others out. I'll review it again when I'm finished merging the remainder of the GNOME docs.

Changed in ubuntu-docs (Ubuntu):
assignee: nobody → Kevin Godby (godbyk)
milestone: none → ubuntu-13.10
status: New → In Progress
Little Girl (littlergirl) wrote :

An additional version to consider:

Adding accounts brings your choice of services, like calendar, chat, and e-mail, straight to your desktop. It also makes their information a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can easily keep in touch with different services, like chats, at the same time. Just set your accounts once, and every time you start your computer all your services are ready for you.

John Kim (kotux) wrote :

I like Little Girl's revision better than mine. However, as Doug once said to me, we don't want to give too much work on the translation team. It's a matter of them showing as much activity as we are right now.

Changed in ubuntu-docs (Ubuntu):
milestone: ubuntu-13.10 → saucy-updates
Greg Beam (ki7mt) wrote :

Trusty, 14.04

I worked through the series files, 8 in total I think. Here's what I ended up with on the particular file:

*****
 Adding your accounts brings a choice of services like calendar, chat, and
 e-mail straight to your desktop, making services a seamless part of your
user experience. By adding accounts, you can keep in touch with services of
different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once
and every time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've
added will be ready for you.
*****

I'll be submitting the the files to lp as a merge proposal in the next day or so.

Launchpad Janitor (janitor) wrote :

This bug was fixed in the package ubuntu-docs - 14.04.1

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ubuntu-docs (14.04.1) trusty; urgency=low

  [ Kevin Godby ]
  * configure.in, html/Makefile, html/ubuntu.xsl, whats-new.page:
    - Bumped version number to 14.04.
  * Typo on printing-cancel-job.page fixed (LP: #1231655).

  [ Little Girl ]
  * ubuntu-help/C/check_status.sh:
    - Added the EXTINCT listing for status to display references to
      previous releases.
    - Added a section on how to use status tags.
    - Fixed the script so that it will find revision elements with stub
      attributes.
  * accounts-create.page:
    - Improved wording (LP: #1220971).
  * Improved structure and minor tweaking of many pages.

  [ Doug Smythies ]
  * ubuntu-help/Makefile.am:
    - Added missing .png files (LP: #1245031).
  * disk-capacity.page:
    - Clarify disk usage analyzer (LP: #1059535).
  * Link corrections so that yelp-check ids will pass.
  * display-dual-monitors.page:
    - Fixed 2 unmatched block elements: section html compile errors.
  * Some occurrences of GNOME only code and .png file requests removed
    (LP: #1232708).
  * PO files updated:
    - Exported the latest translations from Launchpad.
    - Four new languages: et, eu, tg, th.

  [ Benjamin Kerensa ]
  * Update of the MAINTAINERS file.
  * Minor tweaks.

  [ Gunnar Hjalmarsson ]
  * The group "Add & remove software" highlighted on index.page by
    creation of the guide page addremove.page. Related links tweaking.
  * shell-guest-session.page:
    - Added description of how you can disable the guest session
      feature (LP: #1076740).
  * Creation of prefs-language-install.page.
  * keyboard-layouts.page:
    - Rewritten to reflect the "System Settings -> Text Entry" design
      (LP: #1242626).
  * tips-specialchars.page:
    - Sections "Compose key" and "Input methods" removed.
  * debian/control:
    - Bump Standards-Version to 3.9.5.
  * Updated ubuntu-help.pot.

  [ Greg Beam ]
  * The "Online accounts" pages improved, including:
    - Grammar fixes on accounts-whyadd.page (LP: #1220983).
    - Removal of accounts-create.page (LP: #1220971).
    - System settings steps worded as on other pages (LP: #1268775).
  * addremove-install-synaptic.page:
    - Grammar fix (LP: #1222288).
  * Fixed validation errors (LP: #1268834).
  * Note style corrected (changed from "info" to "tip", LP: #1269100).

  [ Jeffery To ]
  * power-hibernate.page:
    - Instructions for re-enabling hibernation updated (LP: #1232814).

  [ Shaun McCance ]
  * html/ubuntu.xsl:
    - Link trail no longer needs override (LP: #1275818).
  * Changes to pass strict validation (LP: #1275866).
 -- Gunnar Hjalmarsson <email address hidden> Fri, 14 Feb 2014 18:07:00 +0100

Changed in ubuntu-docs (Ubuntu):
status: In Progress → Fix Released
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