Sentence on page 14 should be rephrased

Bug #584791 reported by Mo-Yu Mandy Zhou on 2010-05-24
This bug affects 1 person
Affects Status Importance Assigned to Milestone
Ubuntu Manual
Kevin Godby

Bug Description

Version: 788
Chapter and page number: 1, page 14
Type: grammar

In the last sentence of the 'Installing Ubuntu' section, the phrase 'later on' refers only to the installation of extra programs, and not to the parts of the sentence that follow it, which would make more sense. In addition, there should be an oxford/serial comma added before the word 'photos'. I recommend that it be rephrased to "install extra programs, as well as store your own documents, music, and photos, later on".

Kevin Godby (godbyk) wrote :

I've added the serial comma.

I think your 'later on' suggestion is more awkward than the existing sentence, however.

Changed in ubuntu-manual:
assignee: nobody → Kevin Godby (godbyk)
status: New → Fix Committed
importance: Undecided → Low
milestone: none → edition-2
Changed in ubuntu-manual:
status: Fix Committed → Fix Released
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