| 2014-07-17 20:11:27 |
Shellee Aragon |
description |
The latter sentence is incomplete and should be merged with the preceding sentence also some of the verbiage is bizarre:
Bob is interested in ensuring that customers receive a high quality of service. He is concerned that providing too much explicit user control over instance scheduling could negatively impact the quality of service. So he disables this feature.
Proposed revision:
Bob is interested in ensuring that customers receive a high quality of service. He is concerned that providing excess explicit user control over instance scheduling could negatively impact the quality of service as a result, he disables this feature.
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Built: 2014-07-17T17:42:04 00:00
git SHA: c14f57c7e299c76ed1e8f26f02a4a4892657a3eb
URL: http://docs.openstack.org/security-guide/content/case-studies-instance-management.html
source File: file:/home/jenkins/workspace/security-doc-tox-doc-publishdocs/security-guide/ch_case-studies-instance-management.xml
xml:id: case-studies-instance-management |
The latter sentence is incomplete and should be merged with the preceding sentence also some of the verbiage is bizarre:
Bob is interested in ensuring that customers receive a high quality of service. He is concerned that providing too much explicit user control over instance scheduling could negatively impact the quality of service. So he disables this feature.
Proposed revision:
Bob is interested in ensuring that customers receive a high quality of service. He is concerned that providing excess explicit user control over instance scheduling could negatively impact the quality of service as a result, he disables this feature.
Redundant use of adverbs (Additionally, also), use of conjunctive adverb to start sentence (However) and poor verbiage:
Additionally, he also allows users to upload their own images. However, users cannot generally share their images. This helps prevent a user from sharing a malicious image, which could negatively impact the security of other users in the cloud.
Proposed revision:
Additionally, he allows users to upload their own images however, users generally cannot share their images. This helps prevent a user from sharing a malicious image, which could negatively impact the security of other users in the cloud.
Use of conjunctive adverb to start sentence (However):
For migrations, Bob wants to enable secure instance migrations in order to support rolling upgrades with minimal user downtime. Bob ensures that all migrations occur on an isolated VLAN. He plans to defer implementing encrypted migrations until this is better supported in nova client tools. However, he makes a note to track this carefully and switch to encrypted migrations as soon as possible.
Proposed revision:
For migrations, Bob wants to enable secure instance migrations in order to support rolling upgrades with minimal user downtime. Bob ensures that all migrations occur on an isolated VLAN. He plans to defer implementing encrypted migrations until this is better supported in nova client tools. As a result, he makes a note to track this carefully and switch to encrypted migrations as soon as possible.
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Built: 2014-07-17T17:42:04 00:00
git SHA: c14f57c7e299c76ed1e8f26f02a4a4892657a3eb
URL: http://docs.openstack.org/security-guide/content/case-studies-instance-management.html
source File: file:/home/jenkins/workspace/security-doc-tox-doc-publishdocs/security-guide/ch_case-studies-instance-management.xml
xml:id: case-studies-instance-management |
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