The paragraph below has multiple grammatical errors, inclusive of awkward wording and improper punctuation:
Alice's private cloud
Alice's organization has high availability concerns, so she has elected to use MySQL for the database. She further places the database on the Management network and uses SSL with mutual authentication among the services to ensure secure access. Given there will be no external access of the database, she uses certificates signed with the organization's self-signed root certificate on the database and its access endpoints. Alice creates separate user accounts for each database user, and configures the database to use both passwords and X.509 certificates for authentication. She elects not to use the nova-conductor sub-service due to the desire for fine-grained access control policies and audit support.
Proposed Revisions:
Alice's organization has high availability concerns, thus she has selected MySQL as the database for the cloud environment. She places the database on the Management network, utilizing SSL with mutual authentication among the services to ensure secure access. Based on the assumption that external access of the database will not be facilitated, she generates self-signed certificates from the organization’s root certificate, installing the certificates on the database and its access endpoints. Alice creates separate user accounts for each database user then configures the database to use both passwords and X.509 certificates for authentication. She elects not to use the nova-conductor sub-service due to the desire for fine-grained access control policies and audit support.
Also on the same page the below sentence has an additional, unnecessary space following the term database with a couple of grammatical and spelling errors:
Bob is concerned about strong separation of his tenants' data, so he has elected to use the Postgres database , known for its stronger security features.
Revision:
Bob is concerned about strong separation of his tenants' data, therefore he has elected to use the PostgreSQL database, known for its stronger security features.
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URL: http://docs.openstack.org/security-guide/content/case-studies-database.html
source File: file:/home/jenkins/workspace/security-doc-tox-doc-publishdocs/security-guide/ch_case-studies-database.xml
xml:id: case-studies-database
Fix proposed to branch: master
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